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Jared Lambert's avatar

Powerful AF.

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FranB's avatar

Thanks Jared. It feels as if we are rapidly going backwards & the bad guys are winning.

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Jared Lambert's avatar

That is exactly what is happening.

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

One sentence flips the piece on its head. Fantastic writing and a very effective way of showing your message.

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FranB's avatar

Oh, thank you so much. I'm glad you think it works.

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Jane Dougherty's avatar

The ending is so well-paced.

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FranB's avatar

Thank you Jane. It’s a bit dark so I debated whether to post it.

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Jane Dougherty's avatar

I wouldn’t ever let that be a consideration. People feel okay about posting and reading horror stories after all.

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FranB's avatar

True! Me included 😁

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Jane Dougherty's avatar

There you are then. Don’t worry :)

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